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    Elegant Summons


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    Post by Harklight on Sat Oct 16, 2010 2:23 pm

    Whitecaps glimmer under numinous glow.
    Lunar display ignites midnight blue dome.
    Salt licks warm skin, sand seduces toes,
    breeching whale’s flume affirms welcome
    - as though they awaited my return home.

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    Post by *Augustus* on Sun Oct 17, 2010 2:42 pm

    I do really enjoy the aqua/ocean imagery this piece offers the reader. Almost in the style of a limerick I thought the flow was broken by the word 'welcome' which for me didn't fit with the rhyme scheme in tone, which could be intentional as I am not familiar with the form. The use of syllables in this poem creates a solid form and word choice leaves me with the feeling of embracing mother natures womb, the ocean and feeling that certain sense of 'this is where it all began'. Writing that is enthralling, captures the readers emotion and keeps the poem relative to a majority audience, I really enjoyed it over all.

    through waves of joy and clarity
    a fallen angel walked on the sea
    and I'm playing in the shallow water
    laughing while the mad dog sleeps

    Neil Finn

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    Post by Kerry on Wed Oct 20, 2010 5:18 pm

    With so few lines this caught my imagination and ran, inspiring, lovely and much enjoyed, Kerry xx
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    Post by Armchair Queen on Wed Oct 20, 2010 7:00 pm

    What can I say, I love the imagery.
    I picture Cape Henlopen, moonlit and the dolphins that swim along the shoreline.
    Armchair Queen

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