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    deathkeeper


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    Post by deathkeeper on Wed Oct 20, 2010 6:54 am

    please devil take my soul im just an empty vessile taking my taul in the time the time it took me to right this peom i could off just made my own forum im sick of this life all i get into is strife i might as well end it with a knife! please devil take my soul please devil hear my call please devil this is all u asked my for now take my soul and never ever take my moral
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    Pinkbutterflies


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    Post by Pinkbutterflies on Wed Oct 20, 2010 7:46 am

    very gorey hun!!!! Well described
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    Myth


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    Post by Myth on Wed Oct 20, 2010 12:24 pm

    Dark, yet a very genuine feel. I think with your ability to freely express such powerful emotions and little fine tuning to your style you will truly shine in the writer's community...

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    Harklight


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    Post by Harklight on Wed Oct 20, 2010 8:44 pm

    Very chilling, realistic writing, Chris. Be yourself, mate, and please keep writing.
    Big hugs from me. H x
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    Jamie


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    Post by Jamie on Wed Oct 20, 2010 9:09 pm

    There is so much raw pain coming from this write that it echoes in my heart. I do think that final note of never take my moral (morale?) is a bit of hope that lifts the write nicely at the end. Thank you for sharing with us!

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