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    Misty (My kitten.)

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    Pinkbutterflies


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    Post by Pinkbutterflies on Thu Oct 21, 2010 4:36 am

    Nestled beside me, her gracious charm
    Softly caressing her gentle palm,
    Feeling her presence as she is sleeping sound
    Tenderly dreaming of the life she has found.
    Encapsulated by a journey, all for her joy
    Comforted close to her favourite toy,
    Purring aloud with a peace in her tune
    Blending our warmth by the silvery moon
    Given to me as a gift to behold
    Within this lifetime where young become old
    Each day is a blessing, I love you with pride,
    Wake little darling, I’m right by your side.

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    deathkeeper


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    Post by deathkeeper on Thu Oct 21, 2010 5:05 am

    fantastic babeee i loved every word of it the ryming was fantastic i must say one of your best yet
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    Harklight


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    Post by Harklight on Fri Oct 22, 2010 2:36 am

    Your rhyme and flow are great. I read it aloud and the rhythm felt very smooth. The entire write portrays calm moments and, while "a peace" fits without an "a", it's easy to see and feel the placid gentleness between you both. She sounds like a very beloved kitten that returns as much tender caring as you give. Your lines are filled with joyful gratitude. This poem is a delightful read. H x
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    Post by Jamie on Sat Nov 06, 2010 4:07 pm

    The rhyme in this is so innocent and pleasing to the ear. The soft imagery is so loving and playful, and I turned to look and my kitten is beside me doing many of these very things! Much enjoyed, thanks for posting! Reputation to you!

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