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    astroannie


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    Post by astroannie on Fri Oct 22, 2010 7:47 pm

    You glowed as bright as any daytime star
    When I was close, I shone and sparkled, too.
    Between us, now, the distance is so far
    That I perceive no light nor heat from you

    Continuing to wander in the dark
    I cannot just emerge into your light
    No, I must reach and find my inner spark
    For otherwise my life is endless night

    Somewhere inside, a star's awaiting birth
    If only I could get the fire to start
    Reclaim my self and reassert my worth
    Regain my strength and heal my wounded heart

    I must ignite the passion in my soul
    Allow my daunted spirit to be whole
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    Jamie


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    Post by Jamie on Sat Nov 06, 2010 3:56 pm

    Somewhere inside, a star's awaiting birth
    If only I could get the fire to start
    Reclaim my self and reassert my worth
    Regain my strength and heal my wounded heart


    Annie, this may honestly be one of the most beautiful verses I've ever read. Strong and simple, it expresses such deeply-felt emotions so honestly and clearly. Fantastic work, my friend. Reputation to you!

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    Harklight


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    Post by Harklight on Wed Feb 09, 2011 5:56 pm

    Your poem is profound, Annie. Many people are absorbed by their partner's/lover's passion (or light) until they lose theirs. Regaining individuality takes courage and empowerment, which you've deftly portrayed here. Your imagery is strong and beautiful, without being flowery and I enjoyed your rhymes. Bravo! H x

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