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    deathkeeper


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    Post by deathkeeper on Mon Oct 25, 2010 6:31 am

    i like the way i am,
    i hope you can understand,
    i wont change to suit your needs,
    cause i am pretty sure im happy with me,
    if you loved me you would ecept me for me and not this clone of your dream boy,
    justin dream not just me,
    if you ovestly cant see baby you are the one for me,
    i love you but you have to see me,
    nt justin dream.

    <3
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    Harklight


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    Post by Harklight on Sun Oct 31, 2010 2:37 pm

    This is better presentation for a free-form write, mate.
    Please continue reading poetry and your writing.
    It becomes easier with more experience. H x
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    Jamie


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    Post by Jamie on Fri Nov 19, 2010 9:43 am

    I like the independence and resolve of the spiritual expression here. I wonder if you meant "honestly" instead of "ovestly" ? Keep writing, enjoyed the write. Smile
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    Armchair Queen


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    Post by Armchair Queen on Sat Jan 08, 2011 4:52 pm

    I like this short poem, it expresses a universal human sentiment!
    Nice.
    Armchair Queen

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