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    deathkeeper


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    Post by deathkeeper on Thu Apr 21, 2011 12:03 pm

    What's Minnie Without Micky?
    What's Tigger Without Pooh?
    What's Patrick Without Spongebob?
    What's Me Without You.
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    Jamie


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    Post by Jamie on Wed Apr 27, 2011 2:18 pm

    Hey Chris! I love how lighthearted this write is, yet still impels its meaning directly at the reader--a sense of incompletion without your "other." Bright and fun with enjoyable rhyme, well done. Smile
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    Post by Harklight on Fri Aug 12, 2011 4:19 pm

    Good job, Chris! While recalling well-known characters in light-hearted thoughts, readers feel your message hit home at the end. "Me without you" impacts as half of a desired two. I enjoyed the rhyme and that you've easily shown that some halves match. I also like your connection between the title's "with" and the poem's "without". Keep writing. Hugs, H x

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