Pale as Ice

Pale as ice you passed me by
I wondered what you really felt,
I waited through the changing times
to see if you would one day melt.
I thought the ice would melt with warmth
but there were things I did not know,
the sun can touch the outer layers
but does not touch the deepest snow.

Very profound poetry, Pinkbutterflies. I like the way you've said so much in few well-chosen words. The poem tenderly approaches romantic wants using strong imagery. It's hard to break through an ice barrier - from either side. Keep the warmth flowing. H2H
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Hi pinkbutterflies and welcome to Writers Playground!

I thought this was sad, soft, and beautiful. The imagery forges your metaphor with strength and illuminates the sometimes insurmountable distance between two hearts. Nice poem, I hope to see more of your writing.

I really enjoyed this poem, I often try to steer clear from using the words 'but','and' or 'because' at the start of lines it usually detracts from the flow of the poetry, that said I think in the last line it couldn't be helped and the poem as a whole flows with beauty and a sweet sadness. The last metaphor lingers on in the readers thoughts perfectly, profound write. I think maybe another word for 'touch' could be used in the last line too to save from multiple word repetition, maybe skim? or Caress?

Great poem, thank you for joining Writers Playground!

A beautifully sad poem.
You pack such beauty into such a short flowing piece.
Armchair Queen